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The sky is captured in his eyes, clear and blue.
The weather etched smile is honest.
The slender face says sixty; it lies.
It is that and half again.

Knobby hands sun baked and brown
peek out from ragged gloves.
They seem part of the old split locust post
where they are resting;
one of the row of soldiers
that keep watch on their field and its occupants.

The smile broadens as I approach.
I help stretch the wire.
His archaic dialect fills the road
with cows and snow and the yankees
that his grandparents saw marching.
The hours pass pulled by the mule
he plowed with as a boy.

He mentions his wife
they'd been married almost 60 years.
She "took sick" and died (at her own hand)
some 15 years ago.
(it is sad what people must do to escape pain)
But he only remembers the little things
she did so often to help him
they are bittersweet candy.
I know he misses her.

I smile as we finish.
He offers to pay me,
but I refuse it.
for the #HammeredPoetry prompt

I am not sure of the second stanza, it seems awkward.
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Given 2012-02-27
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198three Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
Very Cool, love the first stanza.
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135711cal Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
thank you, I appreciate the input. I had my doubts about the fist line, but it was better after I reworked it. :)
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F1NTAAN Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
:)
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135711cal Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
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bluestar9009 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Amazing.Love the puzzlement and supreme words.
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135711cal Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
thank you I appreciate the encouragement. :)
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animelover2728 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
that was a really sweet poem ,i feel smoothed by it ^^ very nice ^^ very very nice ^^
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135711cal Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :)
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animelover2728 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
your very welcomed ^^ yes i did very much^^
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wh0rem0ans Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
No. The second stanza is such a beautiful comparison that leads on to yankees and suffering fenced in.
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